Hot Pink Shorts

  • Majord0m0's Avatar

    +3

    I like that robogordon is investigating a powerful symbol and its personal meaning- already intrigued.
    Additional nuance and emotional flavour through spoken word elements, great!

  • johnincalgary's Avatar

    +1

    Your writing is poetic. I like this pitch and like its uniqueness. The challenge here would be to hold the viewers attention.

  • robogordon's Avatar

    +2

    thanks! and John I totally agree, to make a longer piece would require more dynamic visual images for variety and to hold the viewers attention.

  • TheCloser's Avatar

    +2

    This pitch is very unique and I like it. good job! I agree with John, would need a lot of visuals. The spoken pieces are very interesting, but yes, they would need equally dynamic visuals to hold the viewer's attention

  • JJincgy's Avatar

    +1

    Agree with John and Closer. Beautifully written. Need to bring the visuals up to level of the written words and this would go far for sure. Great idea. First time I have seen anything on this. :)

  • tomato79's Avatar

    +1

    Really like this concept, think it will work well as a short film format.

  • randy's Avatar

    +1

    You lost me at the "Windsor knot".

  • gdaggett's Avatar

    +2

    Robogordon - Dipstick would love this! Way to go.

  • gdaggett's Avatar

    +2

    PS: I'd suggest adding music to the intro, but I dig your writing. Good job. Love the "Lick my tie." Very original--culture commentary is always a great thing. :)

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